The entire draft for the screenplay my group and I have been working on for the past couple of weeks has been completed! It took a lot of time to develop our ambitious ideas into pages filled with scenes, dialogue, and direction, but as a result, we have made an awesome script. Before I share it to the world, here are the changes that have been made while we finalized it:
- The opening scene has been mostly rewritten in order to cut down on time. This includes removing the part where the Protagonist skateboards outside and other sections of dialogue.
- The action scene has fleshed out the side characters further, with Oliver turning into Oliver Ritchguye, which was a fun way to emphasize that the character was a millionaire, and Ryan (me) into Deathclaw, the most generic villain name I could come up with. The writing is much more dramatic and detailed to further convey how over the top it is.
- The romance scene has a couple of lines rewritten in attempt to make it more comedic, but is ultimately the same as it was before. The Protagonist now asks the Narrator to let them have control of the story instead of just asking if they could talk so it could connect better to the themes of the short film.
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